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Harley Davidson by werewolflegs Harley Davidson by werewolflegs
Sketch: Derwent Graphic Pencils
Derwent Tinted Charcoal Pencils
Derwent Grafcube 9B
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- This critique has been done on behalf of Graphite-Gods as requested -

HI, first off - as a first time traditional artist, you have done a great job on your first few attempts, as many artists are not at this level one they have started.
I would like to commend you on your use of tone, this gives the drawing more dimension and gives the viewer a perception of depth and reality.
I think it, from my personal view, this drawing would have been more effective if you had refined the details and line work of the drawing and rounded off the edging. ( not being able to see your reference ) It also would of been nice to see more effort put into the tire in regards to the grove and pattern of the tire, as this is the main focus of the drawing and the eye is drawn immediately to it.
Also what i have noticed is that for future reference I recommend that you ensure your background is kept clean and as pure as possible, this gives the drawing a more professional and overall greater impression and impact on the viewer ( One technique which could be used to preform this, is to use a separate piece of paper on which you could rest your hand to prevent "smudging" of the graphite pencil on, the drawing, as well as the background ). this is just one technique, but select one which will work for you.

I would like to commend you on your proportions of the bike as it seems to have fair balance and symmetry. but in regards to the top half of the drawing you could again, work on refining your details and make sure you have captured the necessary details and draw from what you see.
when working with metal it is important to realize that there is "often" a lot of harsh dark tonal areas, as well as intermediate to lighter almost "white" areas where the light strikes the vehicle - so keep in mind the large range of tonal values which you could use.
It is also evident that you have made use of one light source, but keeping in mind this will "mainly" cast shadows in one direction predominantly. For a greater effect and impact you could have also added a overall shadow of the bike which would have been cast on the floor, this will give the viewer a greater sense of a 3D image.
Also a general tip, which may help for the future is to remember the surface which you are drawing, it is smooth? is it rough? it is textured? and render it accordingly to achieve greater "realism".

One last tip :). i see you have only used a 9B, my advice would be to use a greater variety of pencils ranging from hard to soft, as this helps correctly render the desires tonal values needed.

The way in which you have divided the image of the bike in half vertically and positioned it to one half of the page is also a nice "touch" as it is not the conventional "plain" image of the a bike.

ALL being said :), I think you have preformed a fair and satisfactory drawing - In knowledge that you have just started traditional art -. but as in all endeavors, practice makes perfect.

I hope that my advice may have helped in some way. Also keeping in mind that this is my "personal opinion and advice" and it is of your choice whether to adhere to it or not.
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werewolflegs Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012
Thanks a lot! I've just started traditional art so your comment means a lot!
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DarkRiderDLMC Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012
This is a nice job, I'm surprised it got so few views from the H-D club, they may have been out at one of Harley's many boutique shops.
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